Subject: [FFML] [Minor C&C] The Mihoshi Incident, chapter 6 Sent: 9/11/96 12:58 AM Received: 9/11/96 6:49 AM From: Travis Butler, tbutler@tfs.net Reply-To: Fanfic ML, fanfic@fanfic.com To: Fanfic ML, fanfic@fanfic.com >From: Derek Sherman, doppleganger@usa.pipeline.com > >Sorry this has taken so long to get written, but it's undergone no less >than seven major re-writes. Hopefully the rest of the story won't take >quite as long to complete ^_^ Windir: Yes. Lyra: So now we do the follow-up? > However, the same force that had attempted to block her scans of >the warp was at it again, returning false echoes, ghost images, and >generally making a pest of itself. There was a definite intelligence >behind the blocks, and Washu was beginning to suspect the identity >of her opponent. Lyra: Hmmm. The plot thickens. Conclusive proof, at least, that it was *not* Washu. > "I'll let you know in a moment, Commander." LaForge turned to the >Engineering station. "Computer, transfer Engineering controls to this >station." He sat down and began working. "There was a brief surge of >energy in the transporter field right before she was supposed to >re-materialize. I'm attempting to determine the cause of the energy >surge now." Frito: Awww. No more Treknobabble! Windir: Eh? Frito: It all makes sense! Lyra: Oh. > The glowering face of a Romulan woman filled the main screen. >"Attention Federation vessel. I am Captain Kila of the Romulan Warship >Yev'ash. You have entered the Neutral Zone in violation of treaty. We >demand that you withdraw immediately." Windir: I still think this is a little too convenient... > "Is that a threat, Captain?" Kila asked warily. > "An observation." Picard replied. > Captain Kila paused for a moment, thinking. Before she could say >more, an aide stepped up beside her and hurridly whispered in her >ear. Kila's eyes widened slightly and she nodded. "Captain Picard, >I shall.... consider what you have said. Now I have pressing matters >to attend to." > With that, the screen went blank. > Picard turned. "What was that all about?" > "Something's wrong." Troi answered. "Whatever it was that she was >told, it surprised her. Surprised her so badly that she doesn't >consider us to be much of a threat right now." > "That would have to be some surprise." Riker commented. Then he >frowned, turning the pink cube over in his hands. "You don't think..." Lyra: Uh-oh... Frito: Huh. Windir: I believe I am beginning to suspect the reason *why* the author brought the Romulans into the story. Frito: Yeah, since da Klingons ain't enemies no more. Ain't dat a waste of a good enemy? >"I'll ask you one last time." the Romulan officer spat, "What are you >doing aboard this vessel?" > "I don't know!" Mihoshi whined, her voice raising in pitch with >each word. "I was on my ship, and Yukinojo said that another ship had >arrived, so I decided to try and call up a cup of coffee, but my cube >wasn't working right, and then the Enterprise said that they were going >to beam me back - which is a really strange feeling, I might add. Kinda >like sitting in a fizzy soda, not that I've ever actually *done* some- >thing like that, but I bet that that's what it would feel like if I >actually-" Lyra: Another nice Mihoshi bit. :) > "Yes, Captain. She was found in the aft cargo hold." He shot a >withering glance at Mihoshi. "So far she hasn't been very cooperative." Frito: Aw, but she was *tryin'*! > "Liar! Centurians!" Kila shouted. Two glowering Centurians entered >the room. "Take this spy to the brig!" Lyra: Um, I believe you mean Centurions. Centurians would be from Alpha Centuari. :) > "I see." Picard mused, looking at Sasami. "Sasami, we have a small >mystery on our hands, and we're hoping that you can shed some light >on the situation." He motioned towards his command chair. "Would you >like to sit down?" Frito: Don't look like he's no better with children! Lyra: And a rather... interesting... target of condescension in Sasami. :) >"Hello? Hello!" Mihoshi's shrill cry rang out from the brig. "I need to >use the toilet! Please, let me out of here!" > Looking out from behind the force field, Mihoshi chewed her lower >lip. "Where did everyone go?" she wondered aloud. "Why haven't they >come to let me use the toilet?" Her eyes wandered around the cell >she found herself in, then focused on a small panel mounted on the >far wall. It was covered with symbols she couldn't understand. > Walking over to the panel, she leaned forward slightly and pressed >on it. She yelped as the panel swung open with a loud *CLACK*, then >broke off of its mountings and fell to the floor. "Oh dear." she >muttered to herself, peering inside the exposed cavity. There were >numerous cables and conduits and small colored cubes, as well as >four objects that looked like buttons. > "I know what this is!" Mihoshi announced happily. "Just like the >utility controls back at the Academy!" She frowned, slightly. "But >which one opens the door to the bathroom?" She closed her eyes, >concentrating. "Oh, I never was good at multiple-choice tests!" Eyes >still closed, Mihoshi began chanting. "Eeeny, meeny, miney, Moe!" >She stabbed the third button. Nothing. > "Meeny!" she said, stabbing the first button. Nothing. > "Miney?" The second button. Still nothing. > "Eeeny?" she sobbed, pressing the fourth - and last - button. > There was a muffled sizzle, then the force field sealing the cell >flashed and went dark. > All too aware of the growing pressure in her abdomen, Mihoshi >walked out of the cell, into the hallway beyond, and looked around. >"Hello? Hello? Is there anyone out here?" There was no answer. >"Guess I'm going to have to find the toilet all by myself." > With that, she began walking. [Editor's note: Ghu, this was too good to cut. :)] Lyra: L-love it! Truly *classic* Mihoshi. Frito: Bwa-ha-ha.... >-------------------------------------------------------- > >And thus, Chapter 6 comes to a close - and Mihoshi is turned >loose on an unsuspecting Romulan crew ^_^ Lyra: Well, *now* do you admit this was justified? Windir: <> Very well. I am forced to admit that it may indeed have been justified. Perhaps. Frito: Aw, don't be such a sore loser! Windir: I *still* believe that the introduction needs to flow more naturally from the story. Lyra & Frito: [Editor's note: Sigh is right. Another one-paragraph quick comment turns into a C&C.] Travis Butler (The Professor, formerly of Myth and Magick!, Lawrence, KS; tbutler@tfs.net, now from the Wandering Powerbook; ; Mac page ) ...Cats are the proof of a higher purpose to the universe.